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01-13-2019, 01:06 PM
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King's Writer
Join Date: Jul 2002
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Coming back to the first typo gandalf85 found: The missing apostroph at the end of the thrid paragraph is intentional. The direct speach continues in the fourth paragraph and in such cases in we find always only a apostroph at the begining of the next but none at the end of the paragraph.
Respectfully Findegil |
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01-14-2019, 08:59 PM
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Wight
Join Date: Mar 2014
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Ahh, OK, that rule regarding quotes makes sense. Regarding the authorial voice, Fin, do you come down on the side of removing them from this chapter? I think they feel out of place; as you mentioned, the use of "us" and "we" which clearly show the text was written by a hobbit feels inconsistent with the other chapters (at least the ones I have read so far).
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01-15-2019, 03:15 PM
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NKD-SL-02b and NKD-SL-08.51: Yes, I would remove these.
NKD-SL-04b: Here I am not sure if removal is the right choice. It might be in information worth giving that not many people did know that the Palantir of the Tower Hills still existed. So I would change that passage: Quote:
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01-15-2019, 06:24 PM
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Wight
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I like the idea of making the locations of the palantiri only known to a few, but I suggest a slight change to make it sound better to my ears:
... That was guarded by the Elves, and though NKD-SL-04d{we never}[very few] knew it, it remained there, until Círdan put it aboard Elrond’s ship when he left. ... |
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01-16-2019, 01:29 PM
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King's Writer
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NKD-SL-04d: Agreed.
Respectfully Findegil |
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