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Late Istar
Join Date: Mar 2001
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It seems there is are a few points from the past 2+ years on this chapter that I have never responded to, so I’ll look at this now.
Vala-00.3: I agree we should include this phrase that Christopher Tolkien skipped. Vala-04.5: Quote:
Vala-05.2: I agree that we should reinstate this phrase deleted by Christopher Tolkien. Vala-05.3: I like this addition and don’t see any problems with it. Vala-07.2: I agree that thisi s the best place for this, but I think a little bit more editing is needed to make it fit, since Tolkien was writing notes to himself here, not text intended to stand in a narrative. Perhaps: Quote:
- Remove the note “Melkor must be made far more powerful in original nature”. This is Tolkien’s note to himself about how he intends to change the character of Melkor; it means nothing within the tale. - Remove the “sc. he was the greatest created power”, as this is just Tolkien’s explanatory note about what “the greatest power under Eru” means” - Remove the footnote, which unless I misunderstand is Christopher Tolkien’s note. |
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