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Old 10-08-2017, 12:31 AM   #1
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I actually just realized a mistake. In the paragraph about Nargothrond, this change should be made:

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But the realm of Nargothrond extended also west of Narog, even to the sea, save only in the country of the Falas (or Coast), south of Nevrast. There dwelt the Dark-elves of the havens, Brithombar and Eglarest, and they were of ancient Telerian race; BR-EX-16.5 {but}[and] they took {Felagund, lord of Nargothrond}[Círdan, lord of the Falas], to be their king.
It is said later on that Cirdan and Finrod had "alliance" and in the Narn, Faramir and Arminas are clearly not subjects of Nargothrond, so this must be changed thusly.
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Old 10-08-2017, 05:46 PM   #2
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Since we speak about the Falas and Círdan was not called 'King' I would edit diffrently:
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But the realm of Nargothrond extended also west of Narog, even to the sea, save only in the country of the Falas (or Coast), south of {Nivrost}[Nevrast]. There dwelt the Dark-elves of the havens, Brithombar and {Eglorest}[Eglarest], and they were of ancient Telerian race; BR-EX-16.5 {but}[u]and[/b] they {took Felagund, lord of Nargothrond}had taken Círdan, to be their {king}[lord].
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Old 10-09-2017, 12:44 PM   #3
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This seems good.
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Old 10-09-2017, 02:33 PM   #4
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I have looked into the composition of Sil77 and found some parts worth at least considering:

BR-EX-13.5: We discussed this in another thread. Since I want to keep at least the possibility of Galadriel crossing Ered Lindon before the end of the First Age, we have either to skip this passage or alter it:
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… But the land between the mouths of Sirion and {Gelion}[Duin Daer] was little visited by the {Gnomes}[Noldor], BR-EX-13 <LQ2 Taur-im-Duinath, [Footnote to the text: Forest Between the Rivers.]> a tangled forest in which no folk went save here and there a few Dark-elves wandering; and beyond {Gelion}[Duin Daer] the {Gnomes}[Noldor] seldom came, nor BR-EX-13.5 <editorial addition based on LotR came many of them >ever east of {Eredlindon}[Ered Lindon] while BR-EX-14 {that land}<LQ2 their realm> lasted.
BR-EX-23.5: Well from Maeglin and the later map of Beleriand we know that Duin Daer had a Fall above the confluence of Ascar. So we have to change §119:
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… And in the East the wall became ever less sheer, for the vale of {Gelion}[Duin Daer] sloped ever southward steadily, and {Gelion}[Duin Daer] had BR-EX-23.5{neither}[only one] fall {nor}[and no] rapids throughout his course, but was ever swifter than was Sirion. …
BR-EX-28.5:
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§116 In this way the chieftains of the {Gnomes}[Noldor] held their lands and the leaguer upon Morgoth after his defeat in the Second Battle. Fingolfin and Fingon his son held Hithlum, and their chief fortress was at Eithel Sirion in the east of {Eredwethion}[Ered Wethrin], whence they kept watch upon {Bladorion}[Ard-galen]; and their cavalry rode upon that plain even to the shadow of Thangorodrim, and their horses multiplied for the grass was good. Of those horses many of the sires came from Valinor BR-EX-28.5{.}<GA §83 , and were given to Fingolfin by {Maidros}[Maedros] in atonement of his losses, for they had been carried by ship to Losgar.> But Turgon the wise, second son of Fingolfin, …
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§117 The sons of [Finrod}[Finarfin] held the northern march from the pass of Sirion between Hithlum and Dorthonion unto the eastern end of Dorthonion, where is the deep gorge of Aglon. And {Inglor}[Finrod] held the pass of Sirion, and built a great watchtower, {Minnastirith}[Minas Tirith], upon an isle in the midst of the river; but after the founding of Nargothrond this fortress he committed mostly to the keeping of his BR-04 brother[‘s son] Orodreth. BR-EX-30 {But Angrod and Egnor watched Bladorion}<LQ2 [His younger brethren Angrod and {Egnor}[Aegnor] watched the fields of {Bladorion}[Ard-galen]> from the northern slopes of Dorthonion BR-EX-30.5 <Sil77 based on GA §85 , and were the vassals of their brother Finrod, lord of Nargothrond>; and their folk was not great for the land was barren, and the great highlands behind were deemed to be a bulwark that Morgoth would not lightly seek to cross.
BR-EX-33.5: The River Nenning is not included so fare in our description and here we have a nice chance.
BR-EX-34: I think there was a mistake here in the editing. It should be:
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BR-EX-33 {But Inglor was King of Nargothrond and overlord of the Dark-elves of the western havens; and with his aid}<LQ2 But Finrod was king of Nargothrond and over-lord of all the Dark-elves of Beleriand between Sirion and the Sea, save only in the Falas BR-EX-33.5 <Sil77 based on GA§85 , west of {Narog to }the River Nenning, that reached the sea at Eglarest>. There dwelt still those of the Sindar who still loved ships and the Sea, and they had great havens at Brithombar and Eglarest. Their lord was Círdan the Shipbuilder. There was friendship and alliance between Finrod and Círdan, and with the aid of the Noldor> BR-EX-34 {Brithombar and Eglorest were rebuilt and became fair towns}<GA 65 §90 {Here with the aid of the Noldor} (whose skill far surpassed that of the Sindar) Brithombar and Eglarest were walled about with great walls, and fair towns were raised within, and harbors with quays and piers of stone> , recalling somewhat the havens of the Elves upon the shores of Valinor.
BR-EX-32.5: A snipet from GA:
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§119 Thus the sons of Fëanor under the leadership of {Maidros}[Maedros] were lords of East Beleriand, but their folk was in that time mostly in the north of the land; and southward they rode only to hunt, and to seek solitude for a while BR-EX-32.5{.} <GA §86 , and there {Damrod and Diriel}[Amros] abode and came seldom northward while the Siege lasted.>And thither for like purpose the other Elflords would sometimes come, …
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Old 10-09-2017, 02:38 PM   #5
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These are all great, thanks Fin!!
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Old 11-17-2017, 12:29 PM   #6
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As a minor thing I detected revising your draft. I think that this chapter is a good one to include a passage (that f.e. I entitled Of de buildings of the Eldar) at the end with material extracted from Words, phrases and Passages in PE17 pages 108, 109.
I give the work to you because I have not the digitised text in English. Only have a composition extraction copied from the issue translated by me into Spanish.
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Old 11-19-2017, 11:22 AM   #7
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That is a good find, gondowe!
Here is passage gondowe is referring to: Words, Phrases and Passages; ‘Q ambar, metta, world end; ¶ Ambar, umbar, Turambar.’ PE 17; page 108 – 109:
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In Sindarin, owing to the quite different circumstances and history of the Eldar left behind in Beleriand, the development was different. Before the coming of the Exiles from Eldamar a large part of the Sindar lived in primitive conditions, mostly in groves or forest-land; permanent built dwellings were rare, especially those of smaller kind corresponding more or less to our ‘a house’. The natural talents of the of the Quendi had already begun to develop many crafts before the beginning of the westward journey of the Eldar. But thought the journey had an object, in this period the Eldar became accustomed to a nomadic life, and after reaching Beleriand they long continued with it, even after those among the Sindar who still desired to cross the Sea had abandoned hope. Thus the earliest essays of the Sindar in masonry were on the West Coasts in the realm of Círdan the Shipbuilder: harbour-works, quays and towers. After the return of Morgoth to Thangorodrim their building remained undomestic, being mainly devoted to defensive works. Their skill developed rapidly during their association with the Dwarves of the Ered Luin, and later was still more enhanced by the great arts of the exiled Noldor. These latter had great effect in those regions where the Exiles and the Sindar were intermingled; but the Exiles’ arts and habits had little or no influence in Doriath, the realm of Thingol, owing to his hatred of the Sons of Fëanor. In Doriath the only great permanent dwelling was Menegroth, which had been constructed with the aid and advice of the Dwarves: excavated not ‘built’, and underground in the manner of the Dwarves: grim, strong, secret, though made beautiful within by the Valian arts of Melian. Outside the buildings of this period , the Siege of Angband, were mainly of defensive or warlike charchter: walls and battlements and forts. Even the great ‘house’ of Finrod, Minas Tirith, as its name ‘Tower of Watch’ signifies, on an island in Sirion, was primarily a fort intended to command the accesses into Beleriand from the North. Only in Gondolin, a secret city, was the art of the Exiles fully employed in building fair houses as dwellings. But the Noldor generally built family houses in their territories, and even villages of smaller dwellings, and were followed in this by the Men who came into Beleriand and became their allies. Partly in order to establish friendship and alliance with the Sindar, and partly under the necessity of exiles numerically inferior to the former inhabitants, the Noldor learned and ultimately adopted the Sindarin tongue.[Author’s note to the text: Or tongues: the Northern Sindarin had developed in many ways diverged from the dialects of Beleriand (and notably of secluded Doriath), though little is now preserved of it, except in place names. [Its chief phonological divergences were in preservation of intervocal m, and of long open ǭ as such (not as in the South diphtongized to au).] The adoption of Sindarin was also naturally furthered by the intermarriage of Noldor and Sindar in some regions resulting in an almost complete blend of the two Kindreds.][Editorial note to the text: Note that the reading “in many ways diverged” is clear; sc. “having diverged” or “divergent.”]There were thus tendencies in both (a) for Noldorin terms for things peculiar to their culture to be translated into Sindarin forms or imitated, and (b) for Sindarin terms, especially those of which the components were still recognizable related to Quenya, to be given Quenya ‘dress’ in the Quenya ised by the Noldor. Examples of both tendencies were (a) the use of Sindarin bâr [< mbǎr(a)] for ‘house’, a settled built dwelling of a family, larger or smaller: in true Sindarin use it only denoted a small area in which some group had at last settled more or less permanently; (b) of the word for ‘home’. This in its emotional uses as the place of one’s birth, or desire, or one’s ‘home’ returned to after journey or absence, naturally found expression in Sindarin.
[Editorial note to the text: The version of Ambar, umbar, Turambar with continuously numbered pages originally ended at this point. A replacement for the final page, given the same page number, contains the following revision of the end of the discussion.]
¶ But the Noldor generally built family houses in their territories, and often established communities within encircling walls in the manner of ‘towns’. The Men who later entered Beleriand and became their allies adopted the same customs. In order to establish friendship and alliance with the Sindar, and also under the necessity of exiles much outnumbered by the former inhabitants, the Noldor learned the Sindarin tongue,[Author’s note to the text: Or tongues. On this point, see note 2 below, p. …] and for most them it soon became their primary or ‘first-learned’ language.
There was thus a tendency: (a) for Noldorin words and terms for things peculiar to their culture to be translated into Sindarin, or imitated; and (b) for Sindarin terms to be given a Quenya dress and adopted into that language, especially in the case of names compounded of elements that were still recognizably related to their Quenya equivalents.
Examples of these processes are: (a) the use of Sindarion bâr [< *mbǎr(a)] for ‘house’: the permanent building serving as the home of a family, larger or smaller, though in genuine older Sindarin use the word referred to a (small) area, in which some group had at last settled, more or less permanently. [Author’s note to the text: In Sindarin also there arose a new word barthan, in the North also bartham, denoting a large building of masonry used as a dwelling. This was modelled on Q martan (martam-).]
Of (b) an example is the (exilic) Quenya word for ‘home’ in its emotional uses as the place of one’s birth, or the familiar places from which one was separated by journey of necessity, or driven out by war. These circumstances the Noldor had not suffered in Aman, but knew later only too well, not only in their exile from Aman, but in the increasing destruction of their new realms and settlements by the assaults of Morgoth. The word they used in Quenya was mélamar.
Mélamarimma ‘Our Home’ was used of their lost ‘home’ in Aman, but not by the followers of the Sons of Fëanor. Nonetheless this word was modelled on S milbar ‘beloved dwelling’ applied to the places best known and most frequented. It was derived from older mēlā-mbar > mīl(a)mbar. (In true Quenya the adjective form ‘dear’ had the form melda.)
I would put that as gondowe at the end of the chapter, so I would not introduce a sub-title:
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§121 And in Doriath abode Thingol, the hidden king, and into his realm none passed save by his will, and when summoned thither; and mighty though the Kings of the Noldor were in those days, and filled with the fire and glory of Valinor, the name of Thingol was held in awe among them.BR-EX-36
<Words, Phrases and Passages; PE17 Before the coming of the Exiles from Eldamar a large part of the Sindar lived in primitive conditions, … Only in Gondolin, a secret city, was the art of the Exiles fully employed in building fair houses as dwellings.> BR-EX-37 <Words, Phrases and Passages; PE17 But the Noldor generally built family houses in their territories, and often established communities within encircling walls in the manner of ‘towns’. The Men who later entered Beleriand and became their allies adopted the same customs. In order to establish friendship and alliance with the Sindar, and also under the necessity of exiles much outnumbered by the former inhabitants, the Noldor learned the Sindarin tongue,[Footnote to the text: {Or tongues. On this point, see note 2 below, p. …}<BR-EX-38 <Words, Phrases and Passages; PE17 Or tongues: the Northern Sindarin had developed in many ways diverged from the dialects of Beleriand (and notably of secluded Doriath), though little is now preserved of it, except in place names. [Its chief phonological divergences were in preservation of intervocal m, and of long open ǭ as such (not as in the South diphtongized to au).] The adoption of Sindarin was also naturally furthered by the intermarriage of Noldor and Sindar in some regions resulting in an almost complete blend of the two Kindreds.>] and for most them it soon became their primary or ‘first-learned’ language.
There was thus a tendency: … were still recognizably related to their Quenya equivalents.
Examples of these processes are: … more or less permanently. [Footnote to the text: In Sindarin also there arose a new word barthan, in the North also bartham, denoting a large building of masonry used as a dwelling. This was modelled on {Q}/Quenya/ martan (martam-).]
Of (b) an example is the (exilic) Quenya word for ‘home’ … The word they used in Quenya was mélamar.
Mélamarimma ‘Our Home’ was used of their lost ‘home’ in Aman, but not by the followers of the Sons of Fëanor. Nonetheless this word was modelled on {S}/Sindarin/ milbar ‘beloved dwelling’ applied to the places best known and most frequented. It was derived from older mēlā-mbar {>}/by way of/ mīl(a)mbar. (In true Quenya the adjective form ‘dear’ had the form melda.)>
BR-EX-36: This is the insert of the first unrevised part.
BR-EX-37: Here we switch to the revised part.
BR-EX-38: The Author’s note in the revised part is cryptically for me. I used that from the unrevised text instead.
I expanded ‘<’, ‘>’, ‘S’ and ‘Q’. I hope that all these nice phonological sings will go through. Mark that in the last sentence I was not able to find an ‘a’ with macron and caron for the fisrt'a' in mēlā-mbar. For the original text I would have to look harder.

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