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Iras Sabir · 01-06-2008, 12:26 PM

I was thinking that Lizzywould be in town to sell some stuff and sees the group. She had a ram that she rode into town, one of her little ways to get to town, if that's okay, and one of them spooked him?

I dunno quite yet. What do you all think?

Thinlómien · 01-06-2008, 02:15 PM

Welcome, Iras Sabir! Your character looks interesting and when reading the bio, I had a clear vision what kind of person she is.

Just one thing caught my attention, though: Lizzie's history implies that she has had her farm for a few years (at least) but she's not of age yet, being only 32. I wonder if she should be a bit older - unless it's a key point in your character that she is leading such an independent life so early, of course.

As to your idea of how Lizzie could be intoroduced, I think it looks like it would work and would be able to develop into a masterful comedy.

What do you others think?

littlemanpoet · 01-06-2008, 02:45 PM

I was also thinking that from your description Lizzy should be at least 42.

Maybe we could have it that Lizzy, riding her ram, runs across Rudy, Mira, and Hugo in their wagon just outside of Buck Hill, and Hugo's dog, Snatch, starts barking up a storm which spooks the ram which sends it running out of control. Feeling sorry for Lizzy, whom they recognize as a member of a family with whom they are friendly, Rudy and Hugo help her get control of the ram (does it have a name?). They offer her the hospitality of Peony's home, and things develop from there.

What do you think?

Iras Sabir · 01-06-2008, 02:58 PM

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Originally Posted by littlemanpoet

I was also thinking that from your description Lizzy should be at least 42.

Maybe we could have it that Lizzy, riding her ram, runs across Rudy, Mira, and Hugo in their wagon just outside of Buck Hill, and Hugo's dog, Snatch, starts barking up a storm which spooks the ram which sends it running out of control. Feeling sorry for Lizzy, whom they recognize as a member of a family with whom they are friendly, Rudy and Hugo help her get control of the ram (does it have a name?). They offer her the hospitality of Peony's home, and things develop from there.

What do you think?

Perfect! I'll change her to 42. The ram, I think she'll have just name Boy. Should I go ahead and have her riding into town, like with a basket of produce, and the dog freaks Boy out.

Gwathagor · 01-06-2008, 07:24 PM

Good posts everybody!

littlemanpoet · 01-07-2008, 05:01 AM

Just a thought, Iras, if Lizzy throws a rock at the dog, she's throwing a rock at the girl holding the dog, which the three would take even less kindly to than her throwing a rock at their dog. So do you want to keep that in there?

Iras Sabir · 01-07-2008, 09:34 AM

Do you think I should change it to where she missed? Like she was throwing it in it's direction but missed him? Or she was just having to much of a fit to throw right.

littlemanpoet · 01-07-2008, 11:33 AM

It's entirely up to you what Lizzy does with her rock, but Mira's, Rudy's, and Hugo's reactions will not be much different whether Lizzy hits or misses the dog (and Mira).

01-06-2008, 12:26 PM	#1
Iras Sabir Pile O'Bones Join Date: Dec 2007 Posts: 22	I was thinking that Lizzywould be in town to sell some stuff and sees the group. She had a ram that she rode into town, one of her little ways to get to town, if that's okay, and one of them spooked him? I dunno quite yet. What do you all think? Last edited by piosenniel; 01-06-2008 at 01:52 PM.

01-06-2008, 02:15 PM	#2
Thinlómien Shady She-Penguin Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: In a far land beyond the Sea Posts: 8,093	Welcome, Iras Sabir! Your character looks interesting and when reading the bio, I had a clear vision what kind of person she is. Just one thing caught my attention, though: Lizzie's history implies that she has had her farm for a few years (at least) but she's not of age yet, being only 32. I wonder if she should be a bit older - unless it's a key point in your character that she is leading such an independent life so early, of course. As to your idea of how Lizzie could be intoroduced, I think it looks like it would work and would be able to develop into a masterful comedy. What do you others think? __________________ Like the stars chase the sun, over the glowing hill I will conquer Blood is running deep, some things never sleep Double Fenris

01-06-2008, 07:24 PM	#5
Gwathagor Shade with a Blade Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: A Rainy Night In Soho Posts: 2,512	Good posts everybody! __________________ Stories and songs.

01-06-2008, 02:45 PM	#3
littlemanpoet Itinerant Songster Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: The Edge of Faerie Posts: 7,066	I was also thinking that from your description Lizzy should be at least 42. Maybe we could have it that Lizzy, riding her ram, runs across Rudy, Mira, and Hugo in their wagon just outside of Buck Hill, and Hugo's dog, Snatch, starts barking up a storm which spooks the ram which sends it running out of control. Feeling sorry for Lizzy, whom they recognize as a member of a family with whom they are friendly, Rudy and Hugo help her get control of the ram (does it have a name?). They offer her the hospitality of Peony's home, and things develop from there. What do you think?

01-07-2008, 05:01 AM	#6
littlemanpoet Itinerant Songster Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: The Edge of Faerie Posts: 7,066	Just a thought, Iras, if Lizzy throws a rock at the dog, she's throwing a rock at the girl holding the dog, which the three would take even less kindly to than her throwing a rock at their dog. So do you want to keep that in there?

01-07-2008, 09:34 AM	#7
Iras Sabir Pile O'Bones Join Date: Dec 2007 Posts: 22	Do you think I should change it to where she missed? Like she was throwing it in it's direction but missed him? Or she was just having to much of a fit to throw right.

01-07-2008, 11:33 AM	#8
littlemanpoet Itinerant Songster Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: The Edge of Faerie Posts: 7,066	It's entirely up to you what Lizzy does with her rock, but Mira's, Rudy's, and Hugo's reactions will not be much different whether Lizzy hits or misses the dog (and Mira).