Eorling Mead Hall Planning/Discussion Thread - The Barrow-Downs Discussion Forum

littlemanpoet · 04-21-2007, 10:41 AM

I was going to let it go, but I really can't. Foley, it's like this. Regardless of how you see Falco, or how Thornden sees him, Falco does not see himself as 'the serpent'. He is convinced that he's right, and that Thornden has no right whatsoever to do what he did. So in his eyes, it's not a temptation but a right. Therefore, he's not going to try and help Javan "do wrong" without disobeying "the letter of Thornden's law"; instead, he'll try to convince Javan that Thornden had no right to "hijack" his pony. So I need something changed in your post, which of course will change the rest of your post:

“You have a horse, don’t you?” Falco prodded.

needs to be changed to:

"I'm a guest here, young man," said Falco, "and your brother had no call to jail me nor my pony. So he's gone against the Eorl's word in this, see, and you'd be doing no wrong by letting me have what's mine by rights."

What you do with Javan from there is, of course, up to you, but what you have in that post will have to be altered. Sorry (a wee bit).

Folwren · 04-21-2007, 11:53 AM

lol! Elempi! You didn't have to do that. I was teasing.

But I'll change it, of course, according to what you want. Not now...I'm on my way (or supposed to be on my way) out the door.

So...this evening, when I get back, I'll change my post.

-- Folwren

Folwren · 04-21-2007, 06:33 PM

Well, sir, the edit is done. Javan can't blame it on Falco quite as much now. Does my edit look alright?

-- Folwren

Folwren · 04-23-2007, 08:46 AM

I really don't know what to do right now. I'm not particularly good at writing battles or fighting scenes. I'd be willing to do a post during it, but if someone else could move in, that'd probably be good. Thornden may be in the lead, but Folwren isn't good at making plans like this. So if I write anything, it'd probably be really poorly done.

Sorry to triple post.

-- Foolwren

Nogrod · 04-23-2007, 11:25 AM

Something like a basic description of the situation around the ruins might be helpful... How many outlaws, what they're doing, are Eodwine and the twins still hiding or captured already, what do the outlaws want; robbing, ransom (taking that they recognise lord Eodwine), just being brutal...?

Lmp and Celuien, I'll PM you in a minute with an idea that's somewhat unrelated to what Thornden and the rescue-party will do...

littlemanpoet · 04-23-2007, 03:19 PM

I've given you some clues already, Foley. There are about a dozen outlaws (give or take); no horses. Some barking and growling can be heard. Thornden has already been to the ruins, so recall what he saw last time, and throw in some outlaws running about, or under cover and sending arrows flying at the would-be rescuers. This is, by the way, a pretty brutal group, to use Nogrod's word.

Leave Rilef to me, please. None of the party will find him until I reveal his situation.

Folwren · 04-23-2007, 03:21 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by littlemanpoet

I've given you some clues already, Foley. There are about a dozen outlaws (give or take); no horses. Some barking and growling can be heard. Thornden has already been to the ruins, so recall what he saw last time, and throw in some outlaws running about, or under cover and sending arrows flying at the would-be rescuers. This is, by the way, a pretty brutal group, to use Nogrod's word.

I know you've given me clues, but I'm just saying I'm awful at writing such things! But...I'll move forward when I've a chance, if no one else has.

-- Folwren

04-21-2007, 11:53 AM	#2
Folwren Messenger of Hope Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: In a tiny, insignificant little town in one of the many States. Posts: 5,076	lol! Elempi! You didn't have to do that. I was teasing. But I'll change it, of course, according to what you want. Not now...I'm on my way (or supposed to be on my way) out the door. So...this evening, when I get back, I'll change my post. -- Folwren __________________ A young man who wishes to remain a sound atheist cannot be too careful of his reading. - C.S. Lewis

04-21-2007, 06:33 PM	#3
Folwren Messenger of Hope Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: In a tiny, insignificant little town in one of the many States. Posts: 5,076	Well, sir, the edit is done. Javan can't blame it on Falco quite as much now. Does my edit look alright? -- Folwren __________________ A young man who wishes to remain a sound atheist cannot be too careful of his reading. - C.S. Lewis

04-23-2007, 08:46 AM	#4
Folwren Messenger of Hope Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: In a tiny, insignificant little town in one of the many States. Posts: 5,076	I really don't know what to do right now. I'm not particularly good at writing battles or fighting scenes. I'd be willing to do a post during it, but if someone else could move in, that'd probably be good. Thornden may be in the lead, but Folwren isn't good at making plans like this. So if I write anything, it'd probably be really poorly done. Sorry to triple post. -- Foolwren __________________ A young man who wishes to remain a sound atheist cannot be too careful of his reading. - C.S. Lewis

04-23-2007, 11:25 AM	#5
Nogrod Flame of the Ainulindalë Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Wearing rat's coat, crowskin, crossed staves in a field behaving as the wind behaves Posts: 9,308	Something like a basic description of the situation around the ruins might be helpful... How many outlaws, what they're doing, are Eodwine and the twins still hiding or captured already, what do the outlaws want; robbing, ransom (taking that they recognise lord Eodwine), just being brutal...? Lmp and Celuien, I'll PM you in a minute with an idea that's somewhat unrelated to what Thornden and the rescue-party will do... __________________ Upon the hearth the fire is red Beneath the roof there is a bed; But not yet weary are our feet...

04-21-2007, 10:41 AM	#1
littlemanpoet Itinerant Songster Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: The Edge of Faerie Posts: 7,066	I was going to let it go, but I really can't. Foley, it's like this. Regardless of how you see Falco, or how Thornden sees him, Falco does not see himself as 'the serpent'. He is convinced that he's right, and that Thornden has no right whatsoever to do what he did. So in his eyes, it's not a temptation but a right. Therefore, he's not going to try and help Javan "do wrong" without disobeying "the letter of Thornden's law"; instead, he'll try to convince Javan that Thornden had no right to "hijack" his pony. So I need something changed in your post, which of course will change the rest of your post: “You have a horse, don’t you?” Falco prodded. needs to be changed to: "I'm a guest here, young man," said Falco, "and your brother had no call to jail me nor my pony. So he's gone against the Eorl's word in this, see, and you'd be doing no wrong by letting me have what's mine by rights." What you do with Javan from there is, of course, up to you, but what you have in that post will have to be altered. Sorry (a wee bit).

04-23-2007, 03:19 PM	#6
littlemanpoet Itinerant Songster Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: The Edge of Faerie Posts: 7,066	I've given you some clues already, Foley. There are about a dozen outlaws (give or take); no horses. Some barking and growling can be heard. Thornden has already been to the ruins, so recall what he saw last time, and throw in some outlaws running about, or under cover and sending arrows flying at the would-be rescuers. This is, by the way, a pretty brutal group, to use Nogrod's word. Leave Rilef to me, please. None of the party will find him until I reveal his situation.