Beren and Lúthien - Changes needed

[Aiwendil]

I'm afraid "seek"/"indeed" is not a close enough rhyme. I will continue to look for a better rhyme - though at worst, I think the 'triple peak' line could suffice.

As for "you swore" versus "is your oath" - the only problem is that with "you swore" the line doesn't scan quite right. We could make it:

you swore. And this that we now seek

. . . which I suppose might be preferable to my line as it stays closer to the text.

"Feanor's sons" vs. "sons of Feanor": I think that if we go with the latter, we need the definite article:

the sons of Feanor, and to other care

But I'm not convinced that this scans better than 'Feanor's sons'.