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mark12_30 · 01-27-2004, 07:10 AM

Aiwendil, thanks for putting those links in! As soon as I have time to check them all out, I will. And I'm looking forward to it.

Before I read your essay I was hoping it wasn't like others I'd read, which went for over-simplification... VERY glad to see I was wrong!

I'm going to make one more suggestion... which won't be easy for you as a writer but would make it much esasier for the reader, I think. How about providing an opening point-by-point thesis declaration?

In doing so, you would be laying your roadmap early, and declaring your destination; which always feels like you are giving away your thunder-- but actually makes your thunder much more understandable by the time you get to it. In addition, an opening thesis declaration would allow you a good place for earlier definitions of polyphony, homophony, and monophony which would make the *entire* thesis much more readable.

With that structure firmly in place, I'd start recommending the essay to everyone I knew that was Middle_Earth-Music inclined! In some manner, it belongs in the Middle-Earth Music Reviews; in a way, it's a review of everything out there. Hmmm, food for thought.

Anyway-- Please, Aiwendil, please seriously consider such a revision... If you like, I'll very gladly help you construct the thesis paragraph. I've become a big fan of your ideas and I would like them to be easier to understand-- and I think they really can be.

(And then post the WHOLE THING here.) (And send it to TheOneRing.net too.)

Can you tell I like it?

Let me know if I can assist you with a succinct opening thesis paragraph. I'd be thrilled.

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01-27-2004, 07:10 AM	#1
mark12_30 Stormdancer of Doom Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: Elvish singing is not a thing to miss, in June under the stars Posts: 4,349	Aiwendil, thanks for putting those links in! As soon as I have time to check them all out, I will. And I'm looking forward to it. Before I read your essay I was hoping it wasn't like others I'd read, which went for over-simplification... VERY glad to see I was wrong! I'm going to make one more suggestion... which won't be easy for you as a writer but would make it much esasier for the reader, I think. How about providing an opening point-by-point thesis declaration? In doing so, you would be laying your roadmap early, and declaring your destination; which always feels like you are giving away your thunder-- but actually makes your thunder much more understandable by the time you get to it. In addition, an opening thesis declaration would allow you a good place for earlier definitions of polyphony, homophony, and monophony which would make the entire thesis much more readable. With that structure firmly in place, I'd start recommending the essay to everyone I knew that was Middle_Earth-Music inclined! In some manner, it belongs in the Middle-Earth Music Reviews; in a way, it's a review of everything out there. Hmmm, food for thought. Anyway-- Please, Aiwendil, please seriously consider such a revision... If you like, I'll very gladly help you construct the thesis paragraph. I've become a big fan of your ideas and I would like them to be easier to understand-- and I think they really can be. (And then post the WHOLE THING here.) (And send it to TheOneRing.net too.) Can you tell I like it? Let me know if I can assist you with a succinct opening thesis paragraph. I'd be thrilled. <font size=1 color=339966>[ 8:12 AM January 27, 2004: Message edited by: mark12_30 ] __________________ ...down to the water to see the elves dance and sing upon the midsummer's eve.