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06-28-2002, 01:38 PM
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Pile O'Bones
Join Date: Jun 2002
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I'd like your Opinion on something.
This song... I wrote it after I finished Reading ROTK For the first time. Its pretty silly I think, and the punctuation is pretty bad, but Anyways Here It is:
oh what will become of the Mallorn tree that grows by the flowing stream oh what will become of the Mallorn tree now that the elves have gone Will it wilt and fade away will it grown and stay Oh what will become of the Mallorn tree now the the elves have gone And what will become of the great green valleys The rivers flowing strong, Oh what will become of the tallest mountains now that the elves have gone. What will Become of all the people, in kingdoms great and small Oh what will become of all the people now that the elves have gone. Oh What will become of the Mallorn tree Now that the elves have gone who will care for the mighty forests and the ones newly grown Oh what will become of the middle earth When no Elves remain Will all of its beauty, like a river drain Or will what is there still remain
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06-28-2002, 01:45 PM
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Ghost of a Smile
Join Date: Jan 2002
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*wipes away a tear* Oh wow, thats really good. It so sad, I feel tears coming...wow! Got any more?
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06-28-2002, 01:46 PM
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Cornus Caliga
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That's beautiful, Elfchick!!!! I love it!
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06-28-2002, 01:54 PM
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Sword of the Spirit
Join Date: Feb 2002
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That was really beautiful. You are a talented writer, Elfchick! [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img]
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06-28-2002, 01:58 PM
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Desultory Dwimmerlaik
Join Date: Mar 2002
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Very wistful! Have you others?
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06-28-2002, 02:02 PM
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Haunting Spirit
Join Date: Jun 2002
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The song is great!! You should write more of them!!
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06-28-2002, 02:48 PM
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Haunting Spirit
Join Date: Jun 2002
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thats really nice!!!!! write some more! [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img]
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06-28-2002, 03:06 PM
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Shade of Carn Dûm
Join Date: Mar 2002
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wow, that was amazing, elfchick! [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img]
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06-28-2002, 05:07 PM
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The Perished Flame
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That's wonderful...have you put it to music?
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06-28-2002, 05:17 PM
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Shade of Carn Dûm
Join Date: Jan 2002
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I love it ElfChick!
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06-28-2002, 06:55 PM
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Spirit in Eriador
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Thank you Elfchick.
That was really beautiful. [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img]
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06-28-2002, 07:08 PM
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Pile O'Bones
Join Date: May 2002
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Oh wow! That was great (a lot better than my stuff, I assure you)! Do you have more? Or is that it? Because, of course, it would be nice if there were some more.
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06-28-2002, 07:27 PM
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Wight
Join Date: Mar 2002
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Great job on that poem. You should try writing about more books. ^_^ Your work is in demand now, so it wouldn't hurt to try. Good luck with it all.
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06-28-2002, 08:23 PM
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Pile O'Bones
Join Date: Jun 2002
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lol well I have more stuff, but not about LOTR really, I don't spend much time on Songs or poems. I write stories more. Not fan fic either. But yes I think I have a couple more laying around.
Do you really think its anygood?
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06-28-2002, 08:41 PM
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Cornus Caliga
Join Date: Apr 2002
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To be perfectly honest...
yes. It it so sad. And to be truly sad, it has to be good. What kind of stories do you write?
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06-28-2002, 09:24 PM
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Haunting Spirit
Join Date: Apr 2002
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That's beautiful. I'd love to see more of your writings, do you have a website or anything? Goodluck with your writings. (tho you seem not to need it) [img]smilies/wink.gif[/img]
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06-28-2002, 09:34 PM
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Wight
Join Date: Jun 2002
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beutiful. simple and lovely. thats a real tear-gerker, and thats why i love it.
[img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img] (see I have a lighter side too)
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06-29-2002, 04:51 AM
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Animated Skeleton
Join Date: Jun 2002
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I really like that!
One of the most powerful emotions through LOTR is the sense of sadness at the passing of the elves. I think that song expressed it pretty well. [img]smilies/evil.gif[/img]
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06-29-2002, 11:42 AM
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Wight
Join Date: May 2002
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Of course I think it's really good! [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img] I also think you should do some more, or post any others that you have done.
Keep on writing girl, you've got some talent there. ~M P.S. Greetings and solutions, Shadow of Udûn! Welcome to the downs! [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img] [ June 29, 2002: Message edited by: Morquesse ]
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07-02-2002, 12:20 PM
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Pile O'Bones
Join Date: Jun 2002
Location: Middle Earth
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hm... Thank you.
Lets see to answer Ithaeliel's questing. I Write fantasy. Yes thats right. Of course i do mystry and stuff sometimes but mostly fantasy. right now, I'm working on one about a prince and princess of the kingdom of Shankland (I suck and making up names) And they both run away. The princess goes west towards the dark forest and the kingdome of Legends with a knight and a peasant. The Prince goes East towards waterlands. (another kingdom) Anyways, Right away The prince is shot, he doesn't die but he is badly wounded and he is takin to Waterlands palace to be healed. Meanwhile the Knight who is travelling with the princess is Killed. [img]smilies/evil.gif[/img] The Princess and the peasant flee into the dark forest. Get lost. Meet these twelve mysterious guys. They go to this bridge held against the dark forest. (which is always growing and even took over a kingdom) Anyways The bridge is held by the soldiers of shankland and Legends who have a special alliance. anyways, the Legends soldiers attack and burn the bridge. Betrayal! Oh my what a surprize! Meanwhile the Prince goes to see if he can get the dwarves to join the fight against Trandell (no one knows yet that legends is involved) he and his companions (the prince and princess of the waterlands) meet the king of Trandells sister. She agree's to help them. they continue across the greater barrins to the dwarves land, meet a little goblin dude who helps them. travel into the ring of flame. Meet a girl with 26 wolves who comes from the kingdom overtaken by the dark forest so long ago. She goes with them. MEANWHIlE the princess is on her way up dragon peaks. (won't release to much about that now) once they get to the top they ride to dragon Island on what? Dragons! oh come on you can't say you didn't know! anyways. The Princess finds out her mother was the queen of these lost people, and she is the heir. but there are evil people from other islands (haven't got that part worked out yet) who ride dragons to and have Allied with Trandell (how Ironic) ANyways, In the end there will be a big fight, People will die, dragons will die. Lots of other scary stuff will happen. Trandell will be taken over by the kings sister. And I'm not giving the rest of the ending away! Oh and there are these four black horses. THEY RULE. SO what do you think? PS. the names of the places can still be changed, and I'd like a little help with thinking up names for places if someone wants to help. Oh and I need a title.
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07-02-2002, 12:24 PM
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Pile O'Bones
Join Date: Jun 2002
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Oh now you got me started. Here is another poem I wrote. Its not as good as the other. I wrote it when I should have been working on science. ITs not sad like the other just some little thing I scribbled. Its really not to good.
Sword of darkness Long and light Forged for stongness In the night You can weild it If you dare but be warned, For darkness is there. Sword of light Short yet bright with a true hearted weilder Will win the fight If you are weak It be to Reflecting your heart showing it to you Sheild of night Shinning bright With diamonds light Blocking blows left and right Easy to use in a fight Tempting apponents into sight Blocking blows and killing the right In you. Sheild of light Dull not bright using your heart to win the fight Its hard to bear For only the true can weild its light Using their hearts Winning the fight Darkness strong Fighting for you until it clashes with the true then in the blink of an eye it abandons you. Which do you use?
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07-02-2002, 05:34 PM
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Cornus Caliga
Join Date: Apr 2002
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 Augh! It's so... wonderful! *SOB* It's so sad! And the story sounds great! U should get it published!
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07-03-2002, 10:11 AM
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Haunting Spirit
Join Date: Mar 2002
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It's very sad and Haunting, Elfchick. You did a good job. [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img]
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07-03-2002, 09:08 PM
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Ghost Prince of Cardolan
Join Date: Mar 2002
Location: In a box with a fox
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Oh my! Elfchick, these are great! More More! [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img]
gee, I wish I could write like that! [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img]
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07-03-2002, 09:49 PM
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Haunting Spirit
Join Date: Apr 2002
Location: Tower of Sorcery and Lore
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[img]smilies/smile.gif[/img] Sounds great! (Fantasy's the best of course, and dragons improve anything) Could I read it sometime? Free editing services. [img]smilies/wink.gif[/img] (I have very bad grammer and my spelling's not much better but other than that I'm really good at it!) [img]smilies/wink.gif[/img] Names I can do tho. Lots of names. Just ask if you ever need any.
Great second poem too. I think I'd go with the swords, (one in each hand, best way to go) I've never cared much for shields. How far have you gotten in your book? Sounds like you have it well planned out at least, got me beat. Have fun writing!
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07-04-2002, 08:42 PM
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Haunting Spirit
Join Date: Jun 2002
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Hey, thats really cool.
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