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Findegil · 09-08-2023, 12:49 AM

Okay, I agree to your argument. I would than propose a more profound change to include these information into the narrative: At the beginning of Volume II we have an introduction sentence: ‘These were the dark years for Men of Middle-earth, but the years of the glory of Númenor. Of events in Middle-earth the records are few and brief, and their dates are often uncertain.’ Followed by the first chapter-title The Sindarin Princes of the Silvan Elves. I would than shift that chapter title to come directly before SP-SL-04 ‘Others of the Eldar there were who crossed the mountains of Ered Luin in that age …‘. Thus we produce a longer intro that has even an untiteled sub-chapter break (‘* * *’). In it we have as the last passage: ‘Upon the shores of the Gulf of Lhûn the Elves built their havens, and named them Mithlond; and there they held many ships, for the harbourage was good. From the Grey Havens the Eldar ever and anon set sail, fleeing from the darkness of the days of Earth; for by the mercy of the Valar the Firstborn could still follow the Straight Road and return, if they would, to their kindred in Eressëa and Valinor beyond the encircling seas.’ Here we could with some inventive editing put in the description of Tol Eressëa, I think.
Respectfully
Findegil

09-08-2023, 12:49 AM	#5
Findegil King's Writer Join Date: Jul 2002 Posts: 1,721	Okay, I agree to your argument. I would than propose a more profound change to include these information into the narrative: At the beginning of Volume II we have an introduction sentence: ‘These were the dark years for Men of Middle-earth, but the years of the glory of Númenor. Of events in Middle-earth the records are few and brief, and their dates are often uncertain.’ Followed by the first chapter-title The Sindarin Princes of the Silvan Elves. I would than shift that chapter title to come directly before SP-SL-04 ‘Others of the Eldar there were who crossed the mountains of Ered Luin in that age …‘. Thus we produce a longer intro that has even an untiteled sub-chapter break (‘* * *’). In it we have as the last passage: ‘Upon the shores of the Gulf of Lhûn the Elves built their havens, and named them Mithlond; and there they held many ships, for the harbourage was good. From the Grey Havens the Eldar ever and anon set sail, fleeing from the darkness of the days of Earth; for by the mercy of the Valar the Firstborn could still follow the Straight Road and return, if they would, to their kindred in Eressëa and Valinor beyond the encircling seas.’ Here we could with some inventive editing put in the description of Tol Eressëa, I think. Respectfully Findegil