Just a couple things...
Eswen, I still don't know enough about the Dark Queen. Is she elven? Is Eswen inhabited by an evil Maia? What is the
nature of the Dark Queen?
Lira's broken neck - um - means that she's not dead, being an elf, but is incapacitated, at least in body.
Elves: you exist in two realms at once. Think of Weathertop, of how Frodo perceived. That's how you will perceive. You will see many dark things that the humans can't see, but they won't be merely dark to you - they will be perilous, and revealed for what they truly are! Think about it, and try to write at two levels at once, in terms of what your characters perceive. Man, I wish Elora was here for this. It's time I contacted her. I'll try.
You guys have decided that there are guards, and many of them (exact number to be determined on the fly
), and that they knew we were coming. Okay, if that's the way you want it, that's the way you've got it! (sorry - lyrics running through my head today). Let's have at it, friends!
LMP