Everdawn: If you could put Ainemetion's death in your post I would be MUCH abliged! Also, I love the last paragraph between Arie and her father! That looks very good.
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When at last they came, no cheer was uttered to them, nor words of thanks for their pain....
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I see a great feast in their honor with much praise and thanks. I see loved ones running out to great them and tears of happiness being shed. This seems like a more cheery ending for such a dramatic story, yes? Of course I grant that many a sob will heave for the loss of heroes such as Airelome, Gilbereth, and Ainemetion, and for the state of the rescued Succumbed. But all in all, I think the survivors should be given a heroic welcome.
Arien: Don't forget to have Ceros explain their journey to Thranduil.
I'm weaving a post that wraps up their journey home right now. It should be up in about 20 min.
-Maikafanawen