The Legend of Amroth and Nimrodel

[Findegil]

1) The title we used so far was ‘The Legend of Amroth and Nimrodel’. And I agree that we should keep that. But may be we should indicate that we changed it from Tolkiens original.

2) Thanks again for pointing these out.

3) Yes such changes are in the scope of the project, so I agree to the change. But the editing should be a bit different (we never use to points in an editing mark):

… Then he told her of the haven in the south, AN-SL-08.55<Pauline Baynes’ map Edhellond, >where many of his own people had come long ago. …

4) Okay, but I suppose:

… Of what befell Nimrodel nothing is AN-SL-08.57{said here}[known for sure], though there were many legends concerning her fate.

5) Agreed.

6) Yes, I as well think this is fortunate decision.

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Findegil

[ArcusCalion]

These are all wonderful, for 4) I would say "known for certain". I think that sounds more Tolkien-esque

[gandalf85]

Yeah, "known for certain" sounds more Tolkien to me as well.

[Findegil]

I am okay with that as well.

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Findegil

[gandalf85]

Here are my comments on "The Stewards" which became a new chapter after you guys discussed it (I definitely agree with making it a new chapter):

1) One small typo:

They were not expelled while the Third Ago lasted...

"Ago" should be "Age".

2) In AN-SL-21 it says, referring to Hurin the steward:

After his day the kings had always chosen their stewards from among his descendants..

But in "Of Gondor and the Heirs of Anarion" it said, referring to the family of Hurin:

From that time on the kings usually chose their steward from this family…

"Of Gondor" says the stewards were usually chosen from Hurin's family, here we say they were always chosen from Hurin's family. I say we change "usually" in the "Of Gondor" chapter to "always" to be factually correct.

3) AN-SL-21.6 is missing an "and" to be grammatically correct since it is starting a new thought:

The Stewards belonged to a family of the ancient Elf-friends AN-SL-21.6b <HoE and though the Húrinionath were not in the direct line of descent from Elendil, they were ultimately of royal origin, and had in any case kept their blood more pure than most other families in the later ages.>

4) AN-SL-24 feels like a really abrupt transition, but I can't think of anything to add which works well. This is my best attempt, but it feels slightly awkward:

AN-SL-24 <ORP In these days ever {Ever} most vigilant was Mithrandir ...

Do you guys have any better suggestions, or do you think it's fine as it stands?

[ArcusCalion]

1) nice catch!

2) Agreed

3) Agreed

4) Personally I am fine with it as it stands. I gave it a space between the preceeding paragraph so that it would be clear it is beginning a new train of thought.

[Findegil]

1) Good catch!

2) Agreed, we should name that change GHA-SL-14.6.

3) AN-SL-21.6b: Agreed.

4) AN-SL-24: Yes, transition is bad. But your suggestion will change the sense to much. The biggest issue is for me the missing reference: compared to whom is Mithrandir most vigilant? And this lake of reference is due to our editing. So what about:

AN-SL-24c<ORP Ever most vigilant among the Istari was Mithrandir, and he it was that most doubted the darkness in Mirkwood, ...

Does that smothe the transition in your opinion?

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Findegil