Blood Run: A Terror Returns Discussion Thread - The Barrow-Downs Discussion Forum

Dunwen · 08-23-2007, 02:42 AM

Morm and all,

This is what I was thinking of for my next post, in the quote below. My original idea is that Sam heard one of Kuric's mutterings and is responding to that. However, if what I have below won't work with the story, let me know -- I'll be happy to edit. I'll wait till somebody tells me to post it or edit it.

--Dunwen

Quote:

"Volunteer to look good, is all they're doing and then when danger looks at them they put their tail between their legs and run. Bah!" Kuric spat.

Sam frowned. He wouldn’t be much of a hobbit if he didn't stick up for his friend.

“If I was you, Master Dwarf,” he said firmly, “I wouldn’t be so hasty to judge people. I’ve known Eric for twenty years and there’s no cowardly streak in him. But if he came with us and got hurt or worse, his ma and sister would be hard pressed to feed themselves. And he didn’t volunteer like the rest of us did. The mayor just told him he was going, willy-nilly.”

After a short pause, Sam cleared his throat self-consciously and addressed the girl. “Begging your pardon, Miss Leonora, but Jak might not be just a gaffer’s tale,” he said slowly. “Once or twice a year when we were boys, Eric and I would slip off to the Chetwood for a couple of days. Most of the time we'd do our hunting and come back home. But there were a few times when we thought we heard somebody chanting-like, pretty far away. It was always happened at night. We never could find out who it was. We did find Man tracks one time, and a fresh squirrel skin without any arrow mark, but that's all."

Finduilas · 08-23-2007, 09:33 AM

I'm working on a post, but will wait till Morm and Dunwen have finished their thing.

I think that it would work better, maybe, if Lommy's post came after Sam blew up at Kuric. She could maybe add near the beginning of her post that she(Leanora) was trying to change the subject back to the point. I just thought of this, so I'm not sure if it would work.

-Finduilas-

Firefoot · 08-23-2007, 01:51 PM

Dunwen, I don't think that your post in its present form really fits. Perhaps if you started it off with something like: "As the others moved on, Sam was still thinking about Kuric's harsh words about his friend, and finally he broke into the flow of conversation..." Rather than Kuric's quote.

The other way that I could see this working is that maybe Sam corners Kuric later on, after the meeting is over. Something like "I heard what you said earlier, even if no one else did..." Maybe he was standing next to Kuric? That would also satisfy Morm's intention that Kuric muttered it.

mormegil · 08-23-2007, 05:35 PM

It could be vocal, I have no problem with anybody overhearing it. The one problem I have with the post as it stands is that Kuric wouldn't really allow for a pause and allow Sam to begin speaking to Leonora. I obviously could write something that would make it fit nice and neat, if needed but Kuric's natural instinct would be to explode without thinking.

Dunwen · 08-24-2007, 01:27 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Firefoot

Dunwen, I don't think that your post in its present form really fits. Perhaps if you started it off with something like: "As the others moved on, Sam was still thinking about Kuric's harsh words about his friend, and finally he broke into the flow of conversation..." Rather than Kuric's quote.

The other way that I could see this working is that maybe Sam corners Kuric later on, after the meeting is over. Something like "I heard what you said earlier, even if no one else did..." Maybe he was standing next to Kuric? That would also satisfy Morm's intention that Kuric muttered it.

Actually, I really like your second idea, Firefoot. If it's okay with Mormegil, I can set up a future conversation with Kuric by changing my post to have Sam standing next to Kuric and overhearing his mutter. In a later post Sam could then have a word with him when everyone else is leaving.

I will PM the edited post to both of you.

Thanks!

--Dunwen

mormegil · 08-24-2007, 01:15 PM

Dunwen, I like your new post idea.

Finduilas · 08-24-2007, 05:01 PM

Should I let Dunwen post before me, since his post would be before mine, the way I am writing it? But my post wont be progressing me beyond others, just catching up in Ash's point of view.

Durelin · 08-24-2007, 09:53 PM

I say plow on ahead, Finduilas -- I think Dunwen has worked it out so that Sam and Kuric's interaction will come a little later, after the meeting is wrapped up in some way.

08-23-2007, 09:33 AM	#2
Finduilas Ghost Prince of Cardolan Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Home. Where rolling green hills and clear rivers are practically my backyard. Posts: 595	I'm working on a post, but will wait till Morm and Dunwen have finished their thing. I think that it would work better, maybe, if Lommy's post came after Sam blew up at Kuric. She could maybe add near the beginning of her post that she(Leanora) was trying to change the subject back to the point. I just thought of this, so I'm not sure if it would work. -Finduilas- __________________ One (1) book of rules and traffic regulations, which may not be bent or broken. ~ The Phantom Tollbooth

08-23-2007, 05:35 PM	#4
mormegil Maundering Mage Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Texas Posts: 4,651	It could be vocal, I have no problem with anybody overhearing it. The one problem I have with the post as it stands is that Kuric wouldn't really allow for a pause and allow Sam to begin speaking to Leonora. I obviously could write something that would make it fit nice and neat, if needed but Kuric's natural instinct would be to explode without thinking. __________________ “I wish it need not have happened in my time," said Frodo. "So do I," said Gandalf, "and so do all who live to see such times. But that is not for them to decide. All we have to decide is what to do with the time that is given us.”

08-24-2007, 01:15 PM	#6
mormegil Maundering Mage Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Texas Posts: 4,651	Dunwen, I like your new post idea. __________________ “I wish it need not have happened in my time," said Frodo. "So do I," said Gandalf, "and so do all who live to see such times. But that is not for them to decide. All we have to decide is what to do with the time that is given us.”

08-24-2007, 05:01 PM	#7
Finduilas Ghost Prince of Cardolan Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Home. Where rolling green hills and clear rivers are practically my backyard. Posts: 595	Should I let Dunwen post before me, since his post would be before mine, the way I am writing it? But my post wont be progressing me beyond others, just catching up in Ash's point of view. __________________ One (1) book of rules and traffic regulations, which may not be bent or broken. ~ The Phantom Tollbooth

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08-23-2007, 01:51 PM	#3
Firefoot Illusionary Holbytla Join Date: Dec 2003 Posts: 7,547	Dunwen, I don't think that your post in its present form really fits. Perhaps if you started it off with something like: "As the others moved on, Sam was still thinking about Kuric's harsh words about his friend, and finally he broke into the flow of conversation..." Rather than Kuric's quote. The other way that I could see this working is that maybe Sam corners Kuric later on, after the meeting is over. Something like "I heard what you said earlier, even if no one else did..." Maybe he was standing next to Kuric? That would also satisfy Morm's intention that Kuric muttered it.

08-24-2007, 09:53 PM	#8
Durelin Estelo dagnir, Melo ring Join Date: Oct 2002 Posts: 3,063	I say plow on ahead, Finduilas -- I think Dunwen has worked it out so that Sam and Kuric's interaction will come a little later, after the meeting is wrapped up in some way.