Outracing the Flames Discussion Thread - The Barrow-Downs Discussion Forum

Eowyn Skywalker · 02-19-2006, 09:01 PM

If this is going to carry on, I'll narratorially mod a bit, and see if I can get a bit of action going in the Bregoware area, if no one minds. I tossed in a brief post, just to make certain people knew we still lived, but if we, say, want to have an attack, or something else...

(has a few ideas, but isn't going to talk until they're executed)

A curiousity/idea. Basically we're leaving the trip to be a fast paced battle to get to Edoras, right? Well, we ought to get some subplots working. I suggest putting in both a traitor... someone who's not for us... and I also suggest that this person not be Vaenosa, who is the immediate suspect for her sharp temperment, and not Fionn, who seems too farmerly to be possibly dangerous in this manner (unless he gets turned in the middle). I would also suggest a bit of a love story interwound if we want to take one set of characters and get them to fall in love. Just a couple ideas.

I can half-lead Bregoware if Farael's out of commission for any length of time.

Farael · 02-19-2006, 10:44 PM

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Originally Posted by Eowyn Skywalker

I can half-lead Bregoware if Farael's out of commission for any length of time.

Good news, I should be able to post tonight after all (G'd bless Google, I felt so stupid when I found an example that resembled what I was trying to do closely enough that I could figure out the rest on google after spending two days looking at my book and any other "scholarly" source)

I don't know how my times will be this week, I'll keep you up to date as much as I can (no matter how busy I am, I always sneak into the 'downs for a bit when I take a break).

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Originally Posted by Eowyn

A curiousity/idea. Basically we're leaving the trip to be a fast paced battle to get to Edoras, right? Well, we ought to get some subplots working. I suggest putting in both a traitor... I would also suggest a bit of a love story interwound if we want to take one set of characters and get them to fall in love

I think sub-plots should get going, but I'm not sure a traitor could be worked out. Dissention between the two groups and even within them may happen and some minor (or major?) back-stabbing as well. Yet how could we explain someone trying to boycott a mission that is set to help their villages? we have all left family behind, so it makes it hard to find a plausible reason for a betrayal. From the profile of our characters, I don't think that money or power could work to tempt anyone.

Love story? well, that would be easier to work in, but we need some more interactions! it's far too early to start on that, not even two nights into our journey. We should let our characters interact by themselves and see where will lead us to. It would be nice for a Wulfhalmer and a Bregoware to fall in love while the rest keep on arguing over little nonesenses, but we shall see how things work out. In any case, let's not get ahead of ourselves... and Arry.

Naria · 02-19-2006, 11:18 PM

Don't know if this is a Bregoware conversation, but I agree with Farael. The traitor idea would be hard to do at this point. Someone should have been one from the start and not let us know about it, then just started working with it as the story went along. Maybe one of the 'carry ons' could be a traitor and turn things uside down for awhile? My character does not have that in her so I couldn't be one. As far as the love story goes I think it sounds good. I also agree that we should keep on with what we are doing in our travels and just wait and see what happens.

Arry I have put a small post in closing the gap from when Brand and Dorran leave. I thought I should set the scene instead of just leaving it the way it was.

Valier · 02-19-2006, 11:21 PM

Well I have killed the beast and am now waiting for the men to return. So I hope you guys can post soon!!! This is getting good!

Farael · 02-20-2006, 12:05 AM

Well, up went my post and off I go soon. I would REALLY appreciate some help with my first paragraph though, there is something wrong with it and I can't put my finger on what it may be.

Also, something I forgot to ask on my last post:
Arry, is it OK if two (or more) of us PM each other to prepare a surprise for the rest of the group? and if we do, should we keep you in the loop?

Arry · 02-20-2006, 12:34 AM

Farael

Yes, you should definitiely be keeping me in the loop.

and . . . I don't really see anything wrong with the paragraph you were talking about.

-- Arry

Farael · 02-20-2006, 12:43 AM

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Originally Posted by Arry

Farael

Yes, you should definitiely be keeping me in the loop.

and . . . I don't really see anything wrong with the paragraph you were talking about.

-- Arry

We are all a bunch of owls, are we not? I was not expecting answers until tomorrow.... but then, I think you are an hour or two behind me.

Now, does your answer mean that we can plot 'secretly' as long as you are informed?

And also, about my paragraph... it just doesn't seem to flow properly, I don't know... it's probably gramatically correct but I don't find it smooth enough.

02-19-2006, 09:01 PM	#1
Eowyn Skywalker Shade of Carn Dûm Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Somewhere far, far away. Eh. Posts: 402	If this is going to carry on, I'll narratorially mod a bit, and see if I can get a bit of action going in the Bregoware area, if no one minds. I tossed in a brief post, just to make certain people knew we still lived, but if we, say, want to have an attack, or something else... (has a few ideas, but isn't going to talk until they're executed) A curiousity/idea. Basically we're leaving the trip to be a fast paced battle to get to Edoras, right? Well, we ought to get some subplots working. I suggest putting in both a traitor... someone who's not for us... and I also suggest that this person not be Vaenosa, who is the immediate suspect for her sharp temperment, and not Fionn, who seems too farmerly to be possibly dangerous in this manner (unless he gets turned in the middle). I would also suggest a bit of a love story interwound if we want to take one set of characters and get them to fall in love. Just a couple ideas. I can half-lead Bregoware if Farael's out of commission for any length of time. __________________ Sometimes worlds collide. This time, they got their own webpage. Join Middle-earth: Insanity forums today.

02-20-2006, 12:05 AM	#5
Farael Ghost Prince of Cardolan Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: In hospitals, call rooms and (rarely) my apartment. Posts: 1,538	Well, up went my post and off I go soon. I would REALLY appreciate some help with my first paragraph though, there is something wrong with it and I can't put my finger on what it may be. Also, something I forgot to ask on my last post: Arry, is it OK if two (or more) of us PM each other to prepare a surprise for the rest of the group? and if we do, should we keep you in the loop? __________________ I prepared Explosive Runes this morning.

02-20-2006, 12:34 AM	#6
Arry Ghost Prince of Cardolan Join Date: Jan 2004 Posts: 704	Farael Yes, you should definitiely be keeping me in the loop. and . . . I don't really see anything wrong with the paragraph you were talking about. -- Arry __________________ If more of us valued food and cheer and song above hoarded gold, it would be a merrier world – J.R.R. Tolkien

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02-19-2006, 11:18 PM	#3
Naria Ghost Prince of Cardolan Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 500	Don't know if this is a Bregoware conversation, but I agree with Farael. The traitor idea would be hard to do at this point. Someone should have been one from the start and not let us know about it, then just started working with it as the story went along. Maybe one of the 'carry ons' could be a traitor and turn things uside down for awhile? My character does not have that in her so I couldn't be one. As far as the love story goes I think it sounds good. I also agree that we should keep on with what we are doing in our travels and just wait and see what happens. Arry I have put a small post in closing the gap from when Brand and Dorran leave. I thought I should set the scene instead of just leaving it the way it was.

02-19-2006, 11:21 PM	#4
Valier Twisted Taleswapper Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: somewhere between sanity and insanity Posts: 1,706	Well I have killed the beast and am now waiting for the men to return. So I hope you guys can post soon!!! This is getting good!