My "The Hobbit" Script

[Diamond18]

That was very nice, Aragorn. <P>Since you want feedback, there are a couple things I will mention. This scene here:<P> <BLOCKQUOTE>quote:<HR> OLD MAN<BR>No thank you…I would very much like to join you though I’m rather doing a bit of…business<P>BILBO<BR>(rather rude)<BR>Business…No need for any business here, so good morning kind sir. You may try over the hill or under the hill. <HR></BLOCKQUOTE><P>Why did you change adventure to business? I think it's rather important to establish hobbits' distaste for adventure, and this was a good place to do it.<P>And then just something that is one of my favorite lines from the Hobbit: which you left out:<P> <BLOCKQUOTE>quote:<HR> "...I will give you what you asked for."<P>"I beg your pardon, I haven't asked for anything!"<P>"Yes you have! Twice now. My pardon. (Etc.)" <HR></BLOCKQUOTE><P>Those were just a couple things that I missed right away when reading through it.<P>I like the opening, with Bilbo talking about hobbit holes.