The Narn i Chîn Húrin: Beleg & Falivirn

[Findegil]

My appologise for not coming back to this further, but I had a hard time keeping track of the other discussions.

NA-EX-45.3: Aiwendil wrote:

I’m not sure I understand what you mean here by:

Well, I see that this is confusing. I left out the change refered to and redirected my comment. So you are right Aiwendil there is nothing added at position NA-EX-45.2. But I did add it under NA-EX-45.3. But when I looked for that myself I discovered that I had not posted that part by mistake, sorry. So here it goes:

'Follow me, NA-RG-15 {Flinding}[friend], __ from the forest cursed!
Let us haste to his help, __ to Hell if need be {1025}
or to death by the darts __ of the dread Glamhoth!':
and Beleg bounded __ from the bracken madly, 160
like a deer driven __ by dogs baying
from his hiding in the hills __ and hollow places;
and NA-RG-15.5{Flinding}[Gwindor] followed __ fearful after him {1030}
neath the yawning gate, __ through yew-thickets,
through bogs and bents __ and bushes shrunken, 165
till they reached the rocks __ and the riven moorlands
and friendless fells __ falling darkly
to the dusty dunes __ of {Dor-na-Fauglith}[Dor-nu-Fauglith]. {1035}
In a cup outcarven __ on the cold hillside,
whose broken brink __ was bleakly fringed 170
with bended bushes __ bowed in anguish
from the North-wind's knife, __ beneath them far
the feasting camp __ of their foes was laid; {1040}
the fiery flare __ of fuming torches,
and black bodies __ in the blaze they saw 175
crossing countlessly, __ and cries they heard
and the hollow howling __ of hungry wolves.
NA-EX-45.3<Lay {and}And countless captives __ in that camp were chained, {850}
and {Elfin}[Elven] maids __ their anguish mourning. 180
put one they watched, __ warded sleepless,
was stern-visaged, strong, __ and in stature tall
as are Hithlum's men __ of the misty hills.
Full length he lay __ and lashed to pickets {855}
in baleful bonds, __ yet bold-hearted 185
his mouth no mercy __ of Morgoth sued,
but defied his foes. __ Foully they smote him.
Then he called, as clear __ as cry of hunter
that hails his hounds __ in hollow places, {860}
on the name renowned __ of that noblest king 190 -
but men unmindful __ remember him little -
Húrin Thalion, __ who Erithámrod hight,
the Unbending, __ for Orc and Balrog
and Morgoth's might __ on the mountain yet {865}
he defies fearless, __ on a fangéd peak 195
of thunder-riven __ Thangorodrim.{'}>

Then a moon mounted __ o'er the mists riding, {1045}
and the keen radiance __ of the cold moonshine
the shadows sharpened __ in the sheer hollows,
and slashed the slopes __ with slanting blackness; 200

NA-EX-45.2: I am okay with your suggestion, adding only a fullstop after '... on this'.

NA-EX-47.6: Okay we leave the text like it was in the Lay. But my I probably very carefully suggest the unthinkable? =====> a FOOTNOTE

NA-EX-56.6: You are, the could not wandering occupations for him between the flight from Dorthonion and the Nirnaeth.

NA-EX-57.1: I do not fight for that add. It was a just the only additional information that my search through all the descriptions of that battle brought up, so I sought I should at least offer it. I will skip it.

About the editorial bridges leading into the fragments of the Lay: I will go through them one after the other, but for know I have only time for one:
NA-EX-37.2b: Here the bridge is not needed. We will do without.

Respectfully
Findegil