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Old 07-18-2020, 02:09 PM   #121
Galadriel55
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Finrod's Duel
But greater is the guilt
Of he who in the dark
Shameless and stark
Taught pride to Elven hearts-!
"In shameless farce"? "Shameless in arts"? Aaaaahhh!

Quote:
Originally Posted by Epilogue
Why did my fair brother go
Into sunset glow,
Forgiving all oaths?
"And forgive all oaths"?

Quote:
Originally Posted by Epilogue
Did he reach a final accord
In his daunting struggle with fate?
What left he behind in his wake
When he took the Westernly road?
"When to West Wind he was restored"?


Late edits:

Slightly altered the beginning of Captivity, because I realized I'm missing beats.

Quote:
Originally Posted by Meeting of Lutien and Beren
Fates apart, joining them is risky
"Fates apart, and joining them is risky"?

Quote:
Originally Posted by Truth
Is the secret heart of mortals.
Maybe just "The secret etc".

Quote:
Originally Posted by Luthien's Duel
I will take what is and always has been mine!
"And I will take"?

Quote:
Originally Posted by Likewise
Love will melt the chains of cold
Tear down walls of stone and burn the bars away!
Suggestions for "My love" and "the walls".
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