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Old 07-19-2020, 02:06 PM   #127
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Okay - Wind. The song has three verse/chorus pairs, with each verse being 2 stanzas. I think this needs to be:

1/ Amarie realises Finrod is dead, both in her heart and because the forests tell her.

2/ Amarie reaches out to Finrod.

3/ Not knowing whether she has reached him, Amarie mourns Finrod.

Or at least roughly. The Russian splits the mourning verse around the 'outreach' one, and I think I'd like to keep that. Let's see how this goes:

Wind (Amarie's Dream)

AMARIE:
Wind
Has disturbed the slumber of the leaves.
I call to thee
As the daylight fades beneath the trees.
Trees fall still
Like an army mourning their lost king.
No sound tonight
But the willows weeping.

Wind
On the whispered midnight wind I hear
"Just believe
Though neither mind nor eyes can see"
On this grass
There's again the imprint of your feet.
All is still
But the trees are weeping!

Dust is swirling over woodland pathway
Shadows deepen under blooming lindens
What has passed, my lord of constant change
Have you burned the ships that could bear you back again?
You should have stayed at my side...!

Wind
There's a wind that's moaning in the dark
Destined
For a heart that's torn itself apart
Now you're gone
My whole world is like a house in ruins
Now you're gone
And my heart stops beating!

See:
How the stars shine still upon the trees
Listen:
When I speak your name the whole wood sings!
Back
From out of shadow come to me
With the night - and with night you'll heal me!

Let my words flow out between us
Bear you back to star-leaved maples
And with your crown of golden locks
You will raise your head and answer me at last:
Why did you turn from my side?

Wind
Rushing forth from these forest glades
Searching
To bear your spirit on its way
I will wait
To discover if you come or stay
In the Night
And the Night is weeping!

Wind
Bring him to me or give me peace
Come the day
I fear I will have to face my loss
Until dawn
Let me become as the silent trees
Let me stay
In the Night - let pain cease

The mist lies thick o'er woodland pathway
The leafy fingers weave their web
Lord, is all this world a lie?
Lord, have you truly in the darkness met your death?
Will you return to my side?

Wind...
It was just the wind...


I prefer this version - it does what I think the song is meant to do. I've put it into the Libretto (the original version is moved down to Appendix B), but if you feel it goes too far we can look for a middle ground. It's very much a line-by-line edit; I don't think I've even changed any of the rhymes! So individual lines can switch back.

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