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Old 07-15-2020, 10:56 AM   #103
Galadriel55
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I am glad I waited till my proper lunch break to read the song. I was giggling so much! Love it!!! The silliness is perfect.

A few verh small points:

- O, what bravery! O, he's such a hero!: is there a particular reason you didn't go for the more literal "Such heroic gestures"? I think it rhymes better with "distance".

- The whole squabble: it's brilliant! An absolutely inspired comedic section. The whole thing. (Btw, how old are they now - 200+ or something years old at least?)

- For the other who'll rule Nargothrond! --> "For the other brother" perhaps? It works without too, but as a slow "strong beats only" variant.

- Wait, we're solving this amicably?: I am pretty sure the Russian here refers to a parent's permission for the daughter's marriage, but I was laughing so much at the incredulity in your version. Oh Celegorm! Besides, Cur, don't you already have a kid and all? Don't get so excited!
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