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Originally Posted by littlemanpoet
One minor point: if Gaffer Hugo looks back in alarm at your hobbit, that's out of character for him. He might be a little curious, but not alarmed.
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Oh, thanks for pointing it out, I was struggling a bit with that moment. It was not supposed to be about Hugo, it was supposed to be about my character's expression. I have to put some clarifying pronoun or something in there... or actually rather not pronoun... to make sure who are we talking about there... hm...
But yes, at last, the first post