I have send you my draft of my version. As I have said before, it takes into account a lot of your input especially in the beginning, but as we move towards the middle of the story our views differ a lot.
I hope that we can reach a middle ground in it so that the result can be used as the base of that discussion.
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"Alas, poor Yorick! I knew him, Horatio; a fellow of infinite jest, of most excellent fancy."
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