After reading through the draft including the Epilogue, I think we may now include the portion of the Waldman Letter that talks about Sam after Frodo departs, since we are going to spend so much time with him later on in the chapter. Therefore, I added this addition after
ETA-SL-07:
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ETA-SL-07.5 <Letter to Milton Waldman But Sam standing stricken on the stone quay {sees}saw only the white ship slip down the grey estuary and fade into the darkling West. He {stays}stayed long unmoving listening to the sound of the Sea on the shores of the world. Then he {rides}rode home; his wife {welcomes}welcomed him to the firelight and his first child, and he {says}said simply 'Well, I'{ve come}m back'.>
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I changed what Sam says to match the text of the published Lord of the Rings.
In addition, now that the Epilogue breaks up the paragraph,
ETA-SL-15's reference to 'Our King' has no antecedent. Therefore I would change it like so:
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ETA-SL-15 <Appendix A Our King, we {call}called {him}King Elessar; and when .....
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I think this is enough.