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Originally Posted by Boromir88
Posted. Our meeting is finished Legate, if I need to change anything, let me know.
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Looks great, Boro! Only one thing, maybe, since you asked about it - if you could change the mark after "That is a threat indeed." into an exclamation mark. Just to give Óin's reaction a bit of a less "casual" tone.
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