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Child of the 7th Age · 08-18-2003, 10:15 PM

Beren87,

A good start indeed!

One minor thing you might want to add.... Since the plot focuses on relations between the Big and Little Folk, you could use a sentence or two to clarify how Minastan feels about hobbits in general, the hobbit rangers he works with, or the general relations between the Big and Little Folk (whatever you'd prefer to handle).

I'm looking forward to your first post.

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Pio,

"The Triple Terror"....that poor mother!

Cami

08-18-2003, 10:15 PM	#21
Child of the 7th Age Spirit of the Lonely Star Join Date: Mar 2002 Posts: 5,135	Beren87, A good start indeed! One minor thing you might want to add.... Since the plot focuses on relations between the Big and Little Folk, you could use a sentence or two to clarify how Minastan feels about hobbits in general, the hobbit rangers he works with, or the general relations between the Big and Little Folk (whatever you'd prefer to handle). I'm looking forward to your first post. ******************************************* Pio, "The Triple Terror"....that poor mother! Cami __________________ Multitasking women are never too busy to vote.