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Originally Posted by Huinesoron
The problem turns out to be that I just... wrote that line really badly.  I've rewritten it to actually scan, and I think improved the rhyme too. I think it works now! |
I think this works nicely. I really like "dare" there, it's a nice touch.
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Originally Posted by Hui
It's so much fun. Right back at you. I had to re-record the start of 'O Silmarils', but got it eventually (I hope!). I also had to rerecord the new 'Mortal' line - for some reason I kept singing 'know' as 'noo'. No idea what was going on there, but it's really hard to avoid. |
The Taliska rubbing off?
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Originally Posted by Hui
D'aww, spooked minion! Very nice. So I think it would work just fine as you sang it - I'd keep the minions creeping in one by one to fill the time. I'm quite intrigued by the idea of 'Oh my 'ord... upon our border... [Deep breath] Oh my lord, upon our border [etc]'. It sounds like the most natural version; just repeating 'Oh my lord' three times feels like it would need more graphics than we have (eg, Sauron snarling or dismissing the minion each time).
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Fair. I think that would work. And I'm glad you like Spooked Minion, I find him very enjoyable.
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Originally Posted by Hui
Um. I feel like 'shall' is a stronger word: I'd probably want to emphasise it if it was there. Is that what you had in mind? Perfectly happy to do so, but I'm curious as to the why!
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Nothing in particular, especially nothing to emphasize that I thought of. More that it has a nice ring to it, and semantics-wise seems more of a promise rather than a certainty of "will", which doesn't contradict the statement. Thowback to the "You cannot / shall not pass" discussions. But I don't think it needs such an emphasis, and if you feel it's a stronger word then I wouldn't go for it.