1) The works for me.
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I added in one (very long) sentence:
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{"}Who would go? For they must be mighty, ... and confusing them with fears, cares, and weariness coming from the flesh. FW-SL-01.5<The Istari And this the Valar did, desiring to amend the errors of old, ... and to seek to unite in love and understanding all those whom Sauron, should he come again, would endeavour to dominate and corrupt.
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The new sentence explains why the Valar made the decision they did with regards to the form of the Istari. I don't know how much impact moving this sentence would have on the later material as I haven't reviewed them yet.