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Originally Posted by Huinesoron
[I]This [Your/Our?] song's unfinished
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As a stand-alone, I would probably say "The". But since they will be discussing the Song of Creation later on, this might be revisited depending on how heavy you want this reference to point to the same thing.
Though - reading onwards, if you are referring to the same song with "there's much within it", maybe "This song". Leaving it vague as to whether it is the Duel's song or the Noldor's song.
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Originally Posted by Hui
Stronger than love's power. [I know it's an extra downbeat]
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It works, as "po'er".
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Originally Posted by Hui
Rise in song-spoken glory
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This is BEAUTIFUL.
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Originally Posted by Hui
And golden and silver trees [Sorry, I had to!]
Bind death in their boughs.
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^.^
The only thing I can point against is... silVER trees. :/
And gold and silver-leaved Trees, maybe?
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Originally Posted by Hui
And bitter curses become songs!
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... Curses become songs! Wonderful.