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Old 07-09-2020, 11:44 AM   #37
Galadriel55
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Hey, you got in Feanoro!

I think on the whole I like the content of the translation, but this one is probably not my favourite of your pieces in terms of flow, because it looses so much of the rhyming scheme in passing. My favourite line is probably "a single wave of royal hand". Way to underline Comedy Thingol (the immortal creation of Eru, no less!).


Quote:
if I ever do Comedy Thingol Steals Caranthir's Mic (or whatever that song's called) I'll shuffle it back.
Thingol does The Thing We Pretend Didn't Happen?


Meanwhile, can you guess which song was stuck in my head at work the last couple days? Screw Beren and Finrod, I bring you CelNCur reimagined as a couple of bloodthirsty surgeons!


Light of the headlamp
As a star-jewel shine!
Blood from the blood bank
Flow through IV line!
Swear by procedure
Of laparotomy:
We did not learn this
From Grey's Anatomy!

Cursed be the hands not scrubbed to level,
Daring to touch the field that's sterile!
Blood in our veins will turn anemic
If the field sterile isn't hygienic!

For older brother an arm amputation,
For our dear mother a tubal ligation.
Sharpen the scalpel and cut through the dermis!
We call on Powers to witness consent forms!

You gotta end this pesky appendix!
(Take it all out!)
There is a rumour of growing tumour!
(Take it all out!)
Been through a crusher? Your spleen has ruptured!
(Take it all out!)
Surgery even if asymptomatic:
We swore some oaths but they weren't Hippocratic...
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