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Originally Posted by Finrod's Duel
But greater is the guilt
Of he who in the dark
Shameless and stark
Taught pride to Elven hearts-!
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"In shameless farce"? "Shameless in arts"? Aaaaahhh!
Quote:
Originally Posted by Epilogue
Why did my fair brother go
Into sunset glow,
Forgiving all oaths?
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"And forgive all oaths"?
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Originally Posted by Epilogue
Did he reach a final accord
In his daunting struggle with fate?
What left he behind in his wake
When he took the Westernly road?
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"When to West Wind he was restored"?
Late edits:
Slightly altered the beginning of Captivity, because I realized I'm missing beats.
Quote:
Originally Posted by Meeting of Lutien and Beren
Fates apart, joining them is risky
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"Fates apart, and joining them is risky"?
Quote:
Originally Posted by Truth
Is the secret heart of mortals.
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Maybe just "The secret etc".
Quote:
Originally Posted by Luthien's Duel
I will take what is and always has been mine!
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"And I will take"?
Quote:
Originally Posted by Likewise
Love will melt the chains of cold
Tear down walls of stone and burn the bars away!
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Suggestions for "My love" and "the walls".