There is a quite bloody battle there now and the action around the tunnel has been put to an end. At least this far.
Just a small request to you fellow writers.
I have never tried a post like that before and I'm not sure how well it managed to convey the situation and what happened in it. In Finnish I believe I would have been able to make it intelligible with all the changing perspectives and so on, but in English I'm not so sure about it. I have myself quite a clear vision of what happened there, but I would be very happy to have some feedback from that. So did you understand what happened, was it clear or baffling? What was badly / wrongly expressed, which parts were more like messing things up rather than making sense? I would appreciate any feedback from this as it was quite a complex task to me.
Tevildo: Dorran might take it up from there now, I think.
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Upon the hearth the fire is red
Beneath the roof there is a bed;
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