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Originally Posted by Tevildo
Save filled. Child and Brinniel - As we discussed, I used your characters. Please let me know if I should edit anything. I wasn't sure about the Elf thing and Shae. If that's wrong, let me know.
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Erm. . . I don't have much say, considering I don't own either of those characters, but I didn't think that it fit very well. It seems Lindir would be pretty quick to notice that she was a woman, for one thing, and that she didn't look very much like the other slavers for another. When Dorran mistook her for a bad person, that was understandable, considering his position, but Lindir's putting a knife to her back doesn't make sense.
Also, why, in both your posts, does it seem that Shae has no clothing on? It's very confusing and I'm bothered if that's the case. Very, extremely bothered. I'm sorry to be the one to complain, but it seems mighty uncomfortable to me. If she is clothingless, yick, if she is not, Tevildo, sorry, you're posts make it unclear to me.
To finish, if this post seems short tempered, it's because I am short tempered just now and very tired.
My apologies in advance.
-- Folwren