Right: I've edited my post to allow for Grrralph's routine and tried to bring it back round to that well-loved Elven ballad of Diamond's. Personally I think that Saucepan's idea about the order of events makes a lot of sense. The translator's note does tend to break up the action (actually that was originally going to be an elaborate save, but I couldn't bring myself to delete it), so perhaps it would be worth migrating that section to some other point. Anyway, that's really up to Mith.
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