I have posted something, too. Dury, I left the end sort of open with Onli - I did not know whether you don't want to interact in some way there. I can change the ending in some way that would fit you (like, let Vriti approach Kórin, if she wants to play with her too or something; or let it completely finish in some way, if you want to let Kórin go free at last).
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"Should the story say 'he ate bread,' the dramatic producer can only show 'a piece of bread' according to his taste or fancy, but the hearer of the story will think of bread in general and picture it in some form of his own." -On Fairy-Stories
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