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Originally Posted by Galadriel55
I made some progress today but got stuck on the ABAB. I couldn't get it to sound quite right on the sketch, but I was hoping that I will be enlightened in the process of composing. Vain hope.
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Well, it's perfectly singable over what you have in the Progress Report, if that helps.
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Originally Posted by Galadriel55
But in the meantime, I have a question. Progress Report #2 (minus the ABAB, still under construction): do you think Finrod's part is too mellow? Does he need a bit more hardness? I wanna figure out this stanza before I move on to the next bit, in case I need to scrap some of the melody lines and redo them more boldly or something. I had this vision of Finrod intertwining different melodies into his tune and eventually converting the trumpet to his cause, but I think behind the musical symbolism I forgot what the end result is supposed to sound like. Is it too soft? Any other suggestions for the mood/style?
EDIT: what I could also do instead of scraping completely is transfer this whole piece over to the second stanza, where Finrod is less confrontational and has more blissful reminiscence, which can take a mellower and gentler approach. What do you think?
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I like the trumpet-conversion concept, particularly since it's followed immediately by Sauron reclaiming it to grind Finrod down. ^_^
As to the rest... well, I don't know! I've sung it a couple of times, and I like the way it builds in strength as Finrod's part goes on. There's nothing that makes me think it needs changing; isn't that pretty much how he sings it? So I'd say pick what you prefer.
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I've also sung it as verse 2, which also works.
Two specific lines that catch me out: I feel like the last chord on 'prophesying' is pitched wrong, though now that I've noticed it's a chord I guess that's their fault. I also think 'death-defying peaks' could do with a slightly longer first note, and a slightly shorter second & third (at the moment it sounds fairly regular, whereas I'm singing 'defying' quite quickly to allow a fractional pause after 'death').
But really, it's good! I might try and record it at lunchtime just for fun. ^_^
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Originally Posted by Galadriel55
EDIT 2: Also, this is still a touch slower than they have in the musicals. Do you wanna leave it this way, or make it faster to match?
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Leave it unless it bothers you. I always slow songs down when I sing them anyway, so I hadn't even noticed. ^_^
hS