Done
I think it should be fine where it is, as it basically covers the timeframe from awhile back when the mess had started until the present, just from Hilderinc's point of view, so it is basically re-running the same events. And I have sort of assumed what
Nog had posted then taking place: the soldiers and others doing as Hilderinc had commanded and everybody getting ready in the end. There is also a message for Léof in the end, which can be used however you see fit,
Firefoot 
I see I have delved into Hilderinc's psychology even a bit more than I thought, but I sort of had to make it clear why he acted the way he did, especially since you two,
Firefoot and
Foley, seemed to be interested in that, or seemed to have your own assumptions as to how he's going to act.