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Originally Posted by Folwren
Nogrod, let me know if Athanar spoke poorly.
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I don't think he spoke poorly (and I do agree he could have made that comment on "idling" as well), but I might like you to change his stance in the following...
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“Is there anything else?” Athanar asked drily. His fingers tapped impatiently on the tabletop as he looked at Thornden coldly.
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I mean he is an experienced leader indeed and thus realises the value of the information he has just been given. I mean what Thornden said was a bigger gift he could have imagined as he now has a roughly realistic picture of what he is facing. So he would not be impatient to have Thornden stop and look like he's not liking the fact Thornden tells him these things; but rather like interested and curious to learn more - if there would be more...
Maybe something like:
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"Is there anything else?” Athanar asked leaning forwards and gazing Thornden to the eye.
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Or whatever you think would convey the interest he has of learning all there is to learn...
I'll post later in the evening an ending to the short counsel and then we can all continue on other issues.
The next big item would be the banquet in the evening but let's post things before it to get everyone in and meeting others.