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You are, of course, absolutely right. Maybe the better option would have been to let Sally do the last narration (as she actually did at first) but then we wouldn't have been able to put in all of the bookish references.
Other than that, I would have had to write the narration after 20 hours of travel spread out over two days, after reading up on an entire Day's events, which was something I was not prepared to do (plus the narration would have come in WAY late). It was easier at the time to come up with some things in advance.
But the more I read over your death, Nog, the more I dislike it, specifically because of how it doesn't reflect the day's events. I'll let everyone know when I've fixed it up.
And honestly I would not have had this problem if it weren't for sudden unexpected occurrences in my real life situation which necessitated the 20 hours of travel. *sigh*
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