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Firefoot · 07-05-2006, 04:19 PM

Mostly all right. Leof's a tad too accepting in the last paragraph - how about instead of "grinned back, as if in relief," put "nodded slowly, as if in acceptance" or something? Other than that, it looks fine.

07-05-2006, 04:19 PM	#847
Firefoot Illusionary Holbytla Join Date: Dec 2003 Posts: 7,547	Mostly all right. Leof's a tad too accepting in the last paragraph - how about instead of "grinned back, as if in relief," put "nodded slowly, as if in acceptance" or something? Other than that, it looks fine.