07-01-2006, 06:06 AM
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Flame of the Ainulindalė
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Originally Posted by Celuien
Either change, whether by making the first half of Nogrod's post a flashback through use of the past perfect, or by moving the first part up to the transition point is fine for me. Whichever everyone else prefers.  |
I agree. Both work fine.
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