Many thanks to Imladris, Rinfanawen, and Lalwende! The posts are very strong. Those boulders should do the trick!
Rin - If it's alright with you, I'm going to ask Pio to put your post earlier on the thread, since it deals with earlier things and it is well written. The first half (up to the words 'Follow me.") should go at the bottom of box 51. The rest starting with "Diera climbed quickly" can be in box 58. I think this will make the story stronger... I hope this makes sense.
Pio, could you move this? Thanks.