[Marileangorifurnimaluim]

Mista, welcome to the Downs! What other scenes would you like to see changed?<P>KayQy, like your changes! Yes! <P>Definately we need to get rid of "only Sauron can wield..." I hadn't thought of that, (or 'giving the rings' to the elves, that was either an oops or just unnecessary). But that change is very important, because otherwise we lose the tension of Saruman trying to capture the ring for himself, & the entire theme of double treachery: instead we end up with two simple "teams." <P>Plus I missed Gandalf's "do not bother to say 'we'."<P>Very good rewrite ideas to bring in the conspiracy. Do you have a little more detail on when/how this conversation would occur?<P>It runs the risk of going over some heads, but let's not underestimate the audience either. There is a reason to watch movies again.<P>Lo - ha! I'm afraid we may have only 'L' (or maybe l) really.<P>I think shortening the action scenes would leave a lot more room for calm passages in glorious places like Lorien. And it is badly needed, to set off one action scene from another, avoiding the Sinbad syndrome. <BR>As far as the look of Lorien, I give Peter artistic points for uniqueness and a lot of leeway. Lorien looked nothing like what I imagined, but he did make it very different from Rivendell. That was something I wouldn't have considered but in retrospect realize was important.<P>Gosh I'm glad people like my wizard scene. I would welcome changes. I think the tie-in to conversation about the Palantir needs some work, and the first part's not quite there. It works from the moment you see Saruman's feet, casually walking over to give Gandalf a last chance.<P>This is really fun.<P>-Maril<p>[ February 08, 2002: Message edited by: Marileangorifurnimaluim ]