I like the idea of that revision, but the first sentence comes across as somewhat clumsy.
Is it really necessary to include the whole story, even if in a very compressed form? I think we could get away with a quicker mention. How about
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Now Tuor learnt <TO [that] there was no queen of Gondolin[,]> <SF [for Elenwe Turgon's wife] perished in the crossing of the Ice; and Turgon was thereafter unappeasable in his enmity for Feanor and his sons.> [This and] many [other] things [were] taught [to him] by Voronwe . . .
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As for the weeping: I guess I was originally a little overzealous in emending the transition. I suppose that FG-TG-01 can be eliminated.