Manardariel: I don't think the Evil woman should die. I think she should just flee to wherever and not go back to the corsairs. Perhaps the rest of Group C could go back to the corsairs and tell what she did and themselves beg for mercy, but it would be sort of interesting and mysterious if the Evil woman lived I think. Because any reader could guess that she would die, but it works better for the plot and for other options if she lives.
I agree that it should end with Ecthelion beginning the plans for an attack on Umbar. That way the clear cut ending would be Groups A and B becoming friends and revealing Group C's identity -- and clearing the name of the double agent who might have to go into hiding but who knows. Then Ecthelion tells Finduilas that he's going to start the plans.
The last little event could be the wedding. Or would Denethor and Finduilas get married before all this hubbub started? I think the wedding should be after everything--that's my 2 cents.
And I also think that Finduilas should fall in love with Denethor--we already have a pretty intricate plot.
-Maikafanawen
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