SOME GENERAL NOTES ABOUT WRITING!
If you have a word processor, try writing your post in that, and take full advantage of the SPELLCHECK and the GRAMMAR CHECK!!! Then copy and paste the text to your post.
You don't have to make every change the wordprocessor suggests, but it will catch a lot of basic errors that I'm seeing.
Regarding style: Don't try to make everything an epic event!
WRONG:
Granduer the Wizard's bristling brows thrust dauntingly at little Bulbo and the red-clad conjurer cried out in a voice like rolling thunder, "I'll have two teaspoons of sugar, thank you! NO CREAM!!! IF YOU VALUE YOUR LIFE, NO CREAM!!!!"
With a trembling hand, the frightened halfling spooned the sweetener into the cup of tea, each crystal falling with a mighty splash into the steaming brew. He was so nervous that his teeth were knocked to shards and flinders, they chattered so. Bulbo looked up with a bleeding mouth and dread filling his tiny heart, for the wizard seemed on the verge of a cyclonic sneeze that would surely blast him right through his freshly painted front door!
RIGHT:
Grandeur said, "A little sugar thank you, no cream for me."
Bulbo gladly poured the wizard's tea, but he was a little nervous and almost spilled it on the conjurer's fine red robes. But the wizard was too busy stifling another of his enormous sneezes to notice the timid hobbit at all.
Well, you get the idea!
If anyone wants to get in a quick post, do it before I bring on the wolves!
[ January 25, 2002: Message edited by: Gilthalion ]
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