[Nuranar]

So sorry, I wasn't aware that my input on the outline was requested. Although I was meditating something...

At this point, I'm just a little concerned about the attempted kidnapping (how DO you spell that?!) in Act I. Calnan's the type to see the very imminent danger to Devon if Jythralo knows who heard him. I deliberately wrote Calnan as the eldest of Devon's friends - and by a good bit, I might add - to make such a realization consistent with his, shall I say, savvy character. (It also comes, on my part, from a mind enriched by many detective and espionage books. [img]smilies/wink.gif[/img])

That being said, I feel it would be inconsistent with the abilities of the allies to just bop around without protecting themselves, much less to let Devon ramble around on his own. Not to mention that that was just what he was doing when he got involved in the whole mess.

Any thoughts? Am I getting through?

I shall edit in a last name for Calnan as soon as I find/make one - I agonized over "Calnan" as it was. I wasn't aware one was needed - most of Tolkien's characters lack them, especially as we use them.

[EDIT: Calnan is now "Calnan Dontal," for those who are curious. [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img]]

And finally, I anticipate being able to at least check the threads at least once a day (with the exception of a few weekends). Just don't count on me being able to post every day - I am still in school, as patient Pio can attest. [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img]

Many thanks!

Edit: Re-reading the outline, I'm a bit concerned about the lack of action on the Allies' part. They basically do nothing (except for what seems a rather haphazard raid on Jythralo's office) until Jythralo acts and they lose the initiative. The initiative - very important in military matters, as I am learning. But I digress.

If Devon's story is true, some very decisive action is needed very quickly. Since the authorities won't do it - at the present time - I see two alternatives: (A) Try to put a spoke in Jythralo's wheel themselves, or (B) Find out all they can about his plan, his preparations, and especially his own allies; then, depending on the strength of the evidence they gather, they can again approach the Gondorians with a case worth looking into (and in a manner very different from Devon's first attempt), or they can implement a modified Plan A.

How's that?

[ October 22, 2003: Message edited by: Nuranar ]