I'm the first to admit that I would need to re-read the entire thread to see if there are things that I have overlooked in it.
The insertion of those two lays: Eärendil and the Horns of Ylmir, I'm not sure if those changes can be seen in this thread or if they require a different separate thread for each of them.
Admitting that I'm not the most suitable person to revise a Lay, I was hoping if someone like Aiwendil would take a major rôle in the Lays.
Quote:
|
§ 99 At length they had fallen in with a band somewhat too numerous, and Voronwë had dragged her thence but by the luck of the Gods, for all else with them perished, and their foe burned Tuor's house; yet found not the secret way.
|
I wonder at the choice of the word Gods. It somehow bothers me the use of the words Gods,wouldn't the Ñoldor or Tuor would have rather said Valar or Ainur. See change FG-18
Quote:
|
Tolkien almost entirely drops "Gods" as a English translation in later writings. One would normally change "Gods" to "Valar", but the Elvish form Gar Ainion specifically refers to the Ainur, that is, not just to the Valar but also to the Maiar and to the Ainur who remained outside Eä. The English translation should be equally wide. "Place of the Holy Ones" would be a full translation, but is perhaps too cumbersome.
|
A small thing actually.
Quote:
|
Fire-drakes are about it and monsters {of iron}FG-D-10 fare in and out of its gates, and great is that sack of the Balrogs and Orcs.
|
Because of the acceptance of the mechanical monsters, I think that we can use the deleted phrase
of iron in here.
I deleted the other thread.